stainless at March 12th, 2014 11:42 — #1
So I've started written some fiction. I have no idea if it is any good or not.
If anyone has the time, can you read through the four short chapters I have put up and give me some feedback please.
fireside at March 13th, 2014 01:18 — #2
The writing is pretty good. The story feels a little set up, but have to see where it goes. By set up, I mean I knew where it was going after about the first paragraph.
stainless at March 13th, 2014 04:55 — #3
Still early in the story, barely got going.
You won't be expecting the twist
v71 at March 13th, 2014 06:22 — #4
Very interesting , well written and with style, i look forward to read more, keep up the good work
stainless at March 13th, 2014 07:48 — #5
Thanks. I find it incredibly difficult to asses my own writing style. Sometimes I like it, sometimes I hate it.
Another chapter up.
stainless at March 14th, 2014 06:02 — #6
I've added a few more pages. On the last one I've come up with an idea I really like.
The idea is that instead of compiling code into programs, you create a DNA strand and feed it into an incubator. The incubator looks at each gene and converts it into code.
So you could consider each gene as a subroutine, the strands of DNA inside the gene define how the genes interact.
I wonder if it could work
rouncer at March 18th, 2014 15:21 — #7
i read the first page, i didnt know how to get to the second page.
the science was out there enough to confuse the hell out of me, and my guess is the little selfish alien is going to get his ass kicked, as a moral thing.
your shaders look beautiful too.
stainless at March 18th, 2014 15:45 — #8
The menu bar at the top lets you navigate.
Yes the arrogant arsehole has a nasty suprise in his future
Hey maybe you can do all theimages for me
rouncer at March 18th, 2014 16:38 — #9
ok. ill do it... but havent you got pictures already? how many do you want?
stainless at March 19th, 2014 04:58 — #10
I just grabbed some images off the web. If you get inspired, just do what you feel like and tell me where you want me to stick it.
gasto at March 21st, 2014 18:35 — #11
I liked it, but perhaps a bit more detail would and dialogue would benefit the experience. I haven't read it all, just skimmed through.
stainless at March 22nd, 2014 03:00 — #12
I'm kinda downloading it from my mind at the moment, it will definitely need a few re-writes